This is the acceptance entry for being awarded the Perfect poet (week40)!! Also, I would like to nominate rajlakshmi for her entry: Song of eternal wait !
This Poem was awarded the Poem of the Week Award here:
Week 7, Gooseberry Garden!
As she lay her eyes on the sparkling diamond in his hand,
Week 7, Gooseberry Garden!
As she lay her eyes on the sparkling diamond in his hand,
she could hardly believe, it was happening & she would need, for him, a band!
Little did she realise, it wasn't for her,
until he said-" What would she say? Tell me, as if you it were..."
The smile faded, the sparkle in her eyes died..
In the end, it was her who cried.
Forever alone, she felt herself to be..
incapable she'd become to feel the love that everyone else could see..
She said to the empty heart in her sleep,
"how do I 'move on' when in remembrance I weep.."
She'd lived all she wanted to,
there was no purpose, nothing more to do..
She moved to a new city; changed workplaces,
yet everything still carried his traces..
what he would have said, what he'd have done..
The same scent, the same voice in her head; With him everywhere, how far could she run?
She stopped one day, sat by the waves,
thinking of him and what she craves..
It wasn't love, it wasn't him, it wasn't memories, not the promises;
she just wanted his presence like water in the crevices..
that comes and goes, but never stays..
the shore never has any hopes to raise
like the wind that blows
the flake that snows
they come and go,
but, never in parting have any sorrow to show.
To freedom to call and to talk,
to hear little trivia on the long long walk,
to see him everyday & to share ghost stories for hours,
bicker over tea or coffee & whether he's really from Mars!
She's living in a vaccum, with no rescue,
There's only darkness, but maybe with a silver hue!
My entry for:
Poetry Picnic Week 7: Love and Loss
Gooseberry Garden: http://gooseberryygoespoetic.blogspot.com
Poetry Picnic Week 7: Love and Loss
Gooseberry Garden: http://gooseberryygoespoetic.blogspot.com
perfect post,
ReplyDeletethanks for the nomination..
cheers.
Thanx JP! :)
ReplyDeleteWow.. you one the award with one poem :-)
ReplyDeleteThat's great. Awesome talent I must say. All the best. Keep writing!!
working in place your link at Jingle Poetry blog roll...
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make a contribution to poets rally today, you can share this one if you wish, missed you.
blessings.
you rock.
Jingle
Congratulations on the award on are your simple and lovely theme choice. Well done.
ReplyDeleteUnrequited love is a sad thing. Nicely written about here.
JamieDedes
This is my story! More than Love it was to do with my survival n existence..
ReplyDeleteCongratulations for the award.. well deserving..
Many Hugs x
Thank you so much guys for so much encouragement!
ReplyDeleteJP: you will see me at the next rally for sure... :)
Awards for you, thanks for the support!
ReplyDeleteHappy Wednesday.
Thanks for linking..
ReplyDeleteyou rock.
:)
WoW! I can see why you won the award.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, sad & haunting all rolled into one. There is another life beyond this existence of nothingness...I hope you find it...or it finds you.
Congrats and well done!
Just amazing. Perfectly prized!
ReplyDeleteI am sure many could feel this and relate. Nice work.
ReplyDeletemy post was here
http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/05/poem-can%e2%80%99t-believe-it%e2%80%99s-you/
Was feeling sad at the way things had turned out..so heartwrenchingly written. But I was mighty glad at the way you ended it..darkness with a silver hue. The break of a new dawn:-)
ReplyDeletePerfectly written.
ReplyDeleteI love the title and the message of the poem.
Read my latest work here: http://inellezshayra.wordpress.com/2011/05/14/my-heart/
Have a nice day.
Thanks Inellezsharya!
ReplyDeleteo! what a story :(
ReplyDeleteEnjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/19/a-little-while-longer/
very nice, I liked this one of all..
ReplyDeleteThank you Vineet for reading it all... :)
ReplyDeletesad, bless you.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing.
What a sad story! Poor girl...
ReplyDeleteThanks Morning!
ReplyDelete@Classic NYer: It;s fiction, but I agree, Poor girl!
That is wonderful you won this award congrats to you and hope you will win many more great honors
ReplyDeletehttp://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/
Thank u so much Ann!
ReplyDeleteHello.
ReplyDeleteI believe congratulations are in order again...this time for winning Poem of the Week over at The Gooseberry Garden: Poetry Picnic Wk7 theme Love & Loss.
Well done!
Unchain My Heart
Thanks Andy! you were the one to tell me the news! I am ecstatic! Thank you so much! :)
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